Controlled Assessments 
No Comments Shakespeare and the Literary Heritage – Annotated Controlled Assessment
There are some good elements to this essay, while it was inconsistent, there were times when you made clear statements about women’s emotion and linked those statements to facts about the authors, observations about the characters and links to the text itself. Sometimes you explored the language of the texts to strengthen your points and you made some references to the historical and contemporary contexts of the texts. You showed a clear awareness of the text types and the authors and their probable intentions.
To develop your work more:
1) You must remember to focus all paragraphs on the question
2) Every point you make must be supported by a quotation
3) Where possible, those quotations should be explored both for what they mean and also how their language strengthens that meaning
4) Avoid extended exposition of the author’s biography, instead, use that detailed knowledge to strengthen the points you’re making.
5) Link the devices used by the two authors – observing where they might be writing in similar ways about similar things or different ways about different things