Creative Writing – Film Stimulus

I am Chance Atlantic and I am going to tell you the story of my brother.

I was in the changing room with him we were talking about how he was going to celebrate his victory by going down to the nearest travel agent and book a holiday for the whole family he could do this because he was 8 yrs older than me and I was only 13 at the time. I could see the excitement in his face and I could hear the shower running for Finn had just come out of it, he always liked to look and smell his best before his races even though he had to shower again afterwards. I could smell the minty gum he always used to chew before his race to freshen his breath. he said to me that ‘this isn’t like all the other races for what comes next is the even better’. then a man burst into the room and said that he had 2 minutes left until he had to be on the pool side then he grabbed me and started ushering me towards the door saying I need to go to the stands I didn’t argue against it because he looked as if he was under a lot of pressure already.

I was sat in stand 3 in row 1 right at the front, I was on the opposite end to the starting blocks so I could see Finn as he got out of the pool and stood on the stand to claim his medal. I could hear the crowd screaming their encouragements and best wishes and the ignorant shouting their insults, I took no notice of them I sat there wishing I was racing aswell and then I saw him coming out of the walk way and waving to all the people in the stands and putting his thumbs up at them then he looked my direction and winked at me and I winked back, I felt my heart leap at that moment knowing that even though there was all this media attention he still had the heart to look at me. I could feel the red, white and blue flag in my hands then I started to count the stars on it trying to remember the names of all the states, I could smell the chlorine used to clear the water of any impurities and to make it smell fresh. I waited for everybody else to sit down before I took my seat so that I could be seen. then I heard our national anthem being played. I could see the whole crowd going silent just waiting for the 2 beeps and the starting buzzer. I could see my brother talking to a french man standing on his left I think he was wishing him luck and I could feel the hard plastic seat underneath my butt which caused me a bit of pain but I didn’t mind because I would only be there for about 30 minutes. I sat there waiting for the first beep it came and it startled me even though I was waiting for it, the second one came and then BUZZZZZZZ!!!.

There was a thrash of limbs and then the crowd started shouting and screaming and I could see my brother he was in the lead but then he stopped for a second and then carried on he was now in second place to the french man and then that was it the race was done and he came second. I could see the anger in his face and I could hear the tension in his voice as he was being interviewed. I felt my heart sink as I knew he was determined to get the gold medal for our nation. Then I saw he dropped to his side, blood pouring from his leg then I jumped over the barrier and rushed to his side I could hear the crowd talking amongst themselves wondering what happened and whether he would be ok . Then everything started to go blurry and I blacked out.


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